From 1c1bb9b91f5b8ca075ac81f23b7296a6cb687860 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Vibha Sinha Date: Tue, 4 Oct 2016 12:57:14 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] Minor edits to personal email sample --- public/data/personal-email.txt | 8 ++------ 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/public/data/personal-email.txt b/public/data/personal-email.txt index bc468285..041c2b06 100644 --- a/public/data/personal-email.txt +++ b/public/data/personal-email.txt @@ -1,12 +1,8 @@ Hi Team, -The times are difficult! Our sales have been disappointing for the past three quarters for our data analytics product suite. We have a competitive data analytics product suite in the industry. But we are not doing a good job at selling it. +The times are difficult! Our sales have been disappointing for the past three quarters for our data analytics product suite. We have a competitive data analytics product suite in the industry. But we are not doing a good job at selling it and this is really frustrating. -We need to acknowledge and fix our sales challenges. We cannot blame the economy for our lack of execution! We are missing critical sales opportunities. Our clients are hungry for analytical tools to improve their business outcomes. In fact, it is in times such as this, our clients want to get the insights they need to turn their businesses around. We need to buckle up and execute. - -In summary, we have a competitive product, and a hungry market. We have to do our job to close the deals. +We need to acknowledge and fix our sales challenges. We cannot blame the economy for our lack of execution! We are missing critical sales opportunities. Our clients are hungry for analytical tools to improve their business outcomes. In fact, it is in times such as this, our clients want to get the insights they need to turn their businesses around. We need to buckle up and execute. In summary, we have a competitive product, and a hungry market. We are really failing at closing deals and we need to now focus on that. Jennifer Baker - Sales Leader, North-East region -