From bfa6ccac8d30940e4a810b169fce49805023367d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Brad Greenlee Date: Tue, 27 Dec 2016 06:27:02 -0800 Subject: [PATCH] Language and grammar --- _posts/2014-01-02-problem.md | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/_posts/2014-01-02-problem.md b/_posts/2014-01-02-problem.md index 51d6a4a58..58a7224a0 100644 --- a/_posts/2014-01-02-problem.md +++ b/_posts/2014-01-02-problem.md @@ -6,8 +6,8 @@ fa-icon: thumbs-down --- ## The Problem -Local groups don’t have either the technical ability to build advocacy tools nor the ability to reach into the membership lists of national groups. The coordination costs between local and national campaigns is high. +Local groups have neither the technical ability to build advocacy tools nor the ability to reach into the membership lists of national groups. The coordination costs between local and national campaigns is high. -National groups need to protect and grow their membership lists while cultivating trusted local partners to do coordinated campaigning. This allows national groups to build lists, share outreach with local groups, activate campaigns, while protecting the fundraising and contact channel with their members by acting as a passthrough for outreach. +National groups need to protect and grow their membership lists while cultivating trusted local partners to do coordinated campaigning. This allows national groups to build lists, share outreach with local groups, and activate campaigns, while protecting the fundraising and contact channel with their members by acting as a passthrough for outreach. -We face a problem not to different from what airbnb faced. How to find local people who you can trust and work with. In this case it's around social movements and organizing, vs a place to stay. This platform helps connect national groups with organizers who are good and organizers with national campaigns's coordination, lists, and resources. +We face a problem not too different from what Airbnb faced: how to find local people you can trust and work with. In this case it's around social movements and organizing, rather than a place to stay. This platform helps connect national groups with skilled organizers and organizers with national campaigns' coordination, lists, and resources.